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The chart below gives information about the number of books rented in a British local library in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below gives information about the number of books rented in a British local library in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart demonstrates the data collected by months in 2009 about books rented in Malton town library, UK.
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, The number seems to fluctuate peak in December and low in February.
According to
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 the result, The first quarter of 2009
were
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 slightly
rise
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on
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in
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 January and fell in the next month by 4
percent
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per cent
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 and up again in April. Compare
this
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 to the amount of Midyear which was higher and stable In May and double in August. Surprisingly, the number went down to 12 in September,
however
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at the end
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 of the year goes up and hit its highest
to
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 21 in December. In conclusion, the majority of people tend to read books much more during the holiday season and summer break,
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 to the second and third months which are the smallest
among
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of
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 the year.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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