The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts compare the percentage of
people
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, divided by gender, who
are
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employed in the UK in 1988 and 2012.
Overall
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, men who worked full-time had the biggest share among other categories in both years. In 1988, full-time
men
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male
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employees accounted for more than half with around 12500
people
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.
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, male part-timers allocated
for
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just 6% with 1550 workers.
On the other hand
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, the part-time female workers had
bigger
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number
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than full-timers, which were 22% (5200
people
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) and 19% (4400
people
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) respectively. In 2012, there was a decline in the
number
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of
male
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who worked full-time, but it still took the biggest proportion of employment with 47%.
Similarly
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, the percentage of women working part-time was
also
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decreased to 20%. A slight growth was seen in the
number
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of male part-timers with 7% of
people
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.
Likewise
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, women who had a
full time
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job increased in
number
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allocating for around a quarter.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
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