The bar chart showed the percentage of school children learning to play four different musical instruments (violin, guitar, piano, drums) in 2005, 2010, 2015.

The bar chart showed the percentage of school children learning to play four different musical instruments (violin, guitar, piano, drums) in 2005, 2010, 2015.
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the shares of four separate musical instruments played by students at school from 2005 to 2015.
Overall
, the figure for Guitar, Piano and Drum experienced an upward trend.
By contrast
, the opposite trend was recorded for that of Violin.
In addition
, the popularity of
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increased significantly throughout the period. Regarding the rate of Guitar and Piano, the former rocketed and hit
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peak of roughly 27% in the final period and was still the lion’s share of musical instruments selected to
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by school children.
Similarly
, the latter saw
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increase to precisely 25% which was 2.5 times larger than the level of 2005.
Furthermore
, in the initial five years, Drum and Violin stabilized at about 6% and 7.5%, respectively.
Moreover
, whilst the number of students preferring playing Drum jumped and comprised around 8%, there was a reversal in the pattern observed for Violin compared to Drum, where the percentage was reduced slightly down to 7% in 2015.
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