The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five australian cities
The graphic illustrates the conclusion of a survey about the purchase and
frequency of hot
drinks
consumption in a variety of cities in Australia.
Fix the agreement mistake
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Overall
,the chart shows that the percentage of fresh coffee
consumed in every
city is below 45 per cent, which shows the number of purchases of fresh coffee
at the bottom. Therefore
, going to the cafe and having hot drinks is the peak,
especially in Melbourne and Hobart.If we compare the cities, Adelaide-Brisbane has a similar percentage of fresh coffee
purchased in the last
four weeks. As we can see, going to cafes is more
prevalent in each city. Moreover
, Melbourne and Horbat have the same high numbers for having coffee
and tea in the cafe.We can say by summarising the graphic that Australia's buying and drinking
habits are above 30 per cent, which means coffee
plays a significant role in
Australia's big cities.Submitted by temelmelisa9 on
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