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The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008 (%). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008 (%). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows the living
issues
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 of city residents in major
cities
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 in the United Kingdom in the year 2008.
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, it is clear from the chart that the percentage of the problems in health services was the highest on average in 2008.
In contrast
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, the air pollution
issues
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 reported
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 the lowest among all the three categories in all the seven
cities
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. Looking at the information in more detail, we can see that the situation was similar in Newcastle, Belfast, Birmingham, Cardiff, and Manchester, where the proportion of
heath
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health
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 service problems all accounted for between 50% and 60%, higher than the percentages of other
issues
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 in the same
cities
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. Meanwhile, the share of air pollution problems
were
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 the lowest, which was around 5%, 7%, 9%, 12%, and 16% in Newcastle, Belfast, Birmingham, Cardiff, and Manchester respectively.
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, in Glasgow and London, the highest share of living
issues
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 was of education and training, which was about 53%,
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 in both
cities
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.
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 the
precentages
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percentage
percentages
 of air pollution was still the lowest among all the three
issues
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, which was around 9% and 13% in Glasgow and London respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words issues, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant issue
  • high percentage
  • real estate market
  • traffic congestion
  • transportation issues
  • urban areas
  • health services
  • dissatisfaction
  • healthcare facilities
  • crime rates
  • safety
  • law enforcement
  • education and employment issues
  • job market
  • educational systems
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