Task 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. In some countries, more and more adults are continuing to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Write 2 body paragraphs about the advantages and disadvantages of this situation.

There are many reasons why
people
still live with their
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beloved
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loved
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.
Firstly
,
people
want to take care of their parents when they have life expectations.
That is
to say, young
people
are worrying
for
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about
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their parents because they are not doing anything small in life.
For instance
, old
people
often take things made
by
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of
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glasses
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that are broken, so it is dangerous.
Secondly
, old
people
don’t
have stable jobs so they
don’t
have a financial budget.
Hence
, they can not spend on many costs of daily routine in their life so they would not live if they lacked available economics. The drawback of
this
problem is young
people
who
don’t
mature because they always
received
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a fortune from their parent's economy.
As a result
, adult
people
will be burdened financially so they can’t have budgets for other future plans.
For example
, they
don’t
have a less fortune for preparing for some matter of healthcare.
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coherence cohesion
Consider starting with a clear topic sentence in each body paragraph to guide the reader through your main ideas.
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Try to include a wider range of specific examples to support your points more effectively.
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Aim to write a brief introduction and a conclusion to provide a complete structure to your essay.
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The essay addresses both advantages and disadvantages of living with parents, covering multiple aspects.
coherence cohesion
The paragraphs are generally well-organized with clear topic focus.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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