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In the last decade, there has been a great increase in global air travel. What do you think are the reasons for this and do you think it is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Over the
last
 few
years
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 the
number
 of
air
 passengers has increased dramatically. There are a
number
 of reasons for
this
 increase but
also
 some benefits.
However
, it has
also
 caused some problems with
regards
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 to the environment. There are three main reasons for the growth in
air
travel
 and they
are
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reduced costs, more
convenient
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 and an improved network. About the cost, there are now many
buget
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big
 airlines offering
low cost
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 flights.
This
 has meant that other airlines lowered their fares in order to
competition
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.
Also
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people
 are now able to book their own flights online
instead
 of through a
travel
 agent,
ensures
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 that they get the best price.
Finally
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 there are more international airports than ever before.
This
 means that it is much easier to
travel
 than it
was use
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 to be. Generally, these changes have been mostly positive for
people
.
Air
travel
 is no longer only for
the
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rich
people
 and more
people
 have been offered the chance to experience new cultures and experience new things.
Additionally
, more families are able to
travel
 abroad for holidays than in the past. Despite these benefits for
people
,
air
travel
 has had a negative influence on the environment.
This
 is mostly because
air
 fuel produces a large
number
 of greenhouse gasses which in turn cause climate change. In conclusion, it is evident that there are a
number
 of reasons for the increase in
air
travel
 and that
this
 rise has been largely beneficial on an individual level.
However
, the environmental impact of
air
travel
 needs careful consideration.
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supported main points
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introduction conclusion present
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logical structure
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complete response
The essay provides a comprehensive response to the task, considering both the reasons for the increase in air travel and its pros and cons.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic growth
  • Disposable income
  • Aviation technology
  • Efficient
  • Proliferation
  • Budget airlines
  • Globalization
  • Tourism
  • Social media
  • Promotional activities
  • Economic development
  • Cultural exchange
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon emissions
  • Climate change
  • Over-tourism
  • Local resources
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