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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the price of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the price of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates
three
metals
, Copper, Nickel and Zinc, and the typical monthly variation in prices
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throughout
 2014.
Overall
, the
three
metals
 in the first two
months
on
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of
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 2014,
they
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apply
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were
in
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at
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the
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a
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 high
price
 compared
the
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to the
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 other
months
,
then
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and then
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 the trend decreased in the next eight
months
.
However
,
the
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Nickel in January reached
to
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apply
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6%
wich
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which
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 means it's the highest
price
precentage
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percentage
 of the rest of the
metals
, the line in the next
three
months
decline
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until
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to
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 -3%, and
then
 back to
rose
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rise
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 in the
recnt
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recent
months
 to 1%,
While
 the Zinc was slightly fluctuated during the year
,
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apply
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 since it
beign
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being
 with 1% in January and finish with 2% in December.
In
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 the same time,
the
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Copper did not
witnessed
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the
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much
changed
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change
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 in the year, the
price
 decreased between April and October and
then
 increased to above 1%. in conclusion, we can say all
the
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three
metals
relatively
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were relatively
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 close to each other in the
price
 during 2014.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, metals, months, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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