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The chart below shows the price in Euros of four types of bread per kilogram in one European country from 2001 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the price in Euros of four types of bread per kilogram in one European country from 2001 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates,the proportion of 4 different breads in one European country over a period of 5 years between 2001 to 2005.
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, it can be seen that all figures experienced an upward trend except for the
Wholegrain
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bread
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.
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, Brown
bread
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 observed the fastest growth,
whereas
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the
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Wholegrain
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 had no change between the first and the
last
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 year surveyed. in 2001,
Wholegrain
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bread
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 was by far the most expensive compared to others, which was higher
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 0.2
euros
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. Brown and White
bread
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 from 2002 fluctuated from 0.6
euros
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 to 1.4 and higher white
bread
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 rose from 0.6
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 to 1.3
euros
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 respectively. After increasing significantly, there was a plunge in
Wholegrain
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's price hit its lowest point at 0.7 euro, and slightly increased in the final year. From 2002 to 2005,Rye and White increased steadily to 0.7 and 1.3 individually,
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 in contrast Brown's swung steadily and reached a peak at 1.6 in the final year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wholegrain, bread, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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