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The graph below gives information about the pnumber of estimated cars from 2020 to 2035. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the pnumber of estimated cars from 2020 to 2035. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the hundreds number of cars manufactured in four specific different countries
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 the year 2020 and 2035.
Overall
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, as can be seen,
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Japan Shows a significant trend in 2020.
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 China hit the lowest point at the beginning.
Moreover
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, the UK and USA follow almost similar patterns during these years.
It is clear that
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 in 2020 Japan was the dominant country in the production of the Cars 350,
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 by 2035 it will drop Sharply to 100 which will beggest reduction .
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 in
2020
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 the production was at least 100 whit China ,
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, it is supposed that it will increase steadily to 150 by 2035.
On the other hand
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, the UK and USA follow the same patterns with some differences. In 2020 the number of cars was
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high point between 200 and 300 thousand respectively. By 2035 it will probably be that they both will decrease sharply to zero .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • estimated number of cars
  • significant change
  • stable/increase/decrease
  • comparative analysis
  • urban planning
  • environmental impact
  • trend
  • notable year
  • long-term implications
  • data pattern
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