Some people think that social media platforms are useful for business and making new friends, while others think that such websites are harmful. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of social media.

Many people believe that social
media
applications are the new trend ways for making social networks and marketing,
while
others think they are not useful for people in any way.
This
essay will demonstrate that these
platforms
have
significant
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role for business with
its
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their
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wide and
low
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low-cost
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cost
advertisement facilities but will
also
show that it has some
disadantages
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disadvantages
too like wasting
time
. Nowadays it is not easy to find a person
does
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who does
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not use any
of
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apply
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social
media
applications especially if
the
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apply
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someone has a company. Using
this
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these
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platforms
have
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lots of advantages for them and the most significant one is a change to advertise more cheaper than the other options.
For instance
,
according to
a
new
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news
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on BBC giving an
adertisement
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advertisement
only for 2 weeks on a
bilbord
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billboard
in New York will
cost
you 10 000 dollars
while
a
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advertisement on Instagram for a month
the
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same period will
cost
only 500 dollars. And
also
the
adertisement
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advertisement
advertisements
on
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only can seen by
the
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apply
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people who
is
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on the street but
for
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on
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instagram
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it can seen by
eeryone
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everyone
around the world.
On the other
hand
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the
ilnesses
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illnesses
exist with
this
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these
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aplications
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application
applications
as a name of social
media
addiction. These
platforms
steal
the
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time
from
peoples
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people's
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life
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while
they scroll on the main page. The
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research
researches
researchers
show
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shows
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that In 2023 the
time
a person
spent
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on social
media
in Turkey is 2 hours and 15 minutes in a day. It is
definetly
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definitely
waste
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a waste
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of
time
. In Conclusion,
Although
there
is
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are
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some
negatie
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negative
effects of social
media
platforms
like wasting
time
. It is an undeniable truth that they
also
have positive effects like
low
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low-cost
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cost
advertisement options.
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Coherence and Cohesion
While the essay is structured, enhancing the logical flow of ideas can strengthen coherence. Consider creating clearer links between sentences and avoiding abrupt transitions.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that the conclusion reiterates the main points more strongly and clearly, summing up the balanced view presented.
Task Achievement
Extend the exploration of disadvantages and mention other potential negative impacts such as privacy issues or misinformation for a more comprehensive response.
Task Achievement
Ensure all ideas are clearly presented; avoiding unclear phrases will improve comprehension.
Task Achievement
The essay makes a clear attempt to address both sides of the argument, presenting a balanced perspective on social media.
Coherence and Cohesion
A well-structured introduction and conclusion are present, introducing the topic and summarizing the points discussed.
Task Achievement
Specific examples, like the comparison between billboard and Instagram advertisement costs, effectively support the argument for advantages.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social media outreach
  • Professional networking
  • Brand visibility
  • Customer engagement
  • Misinformation
  • Digital marketing
  • Privacy concerns
  • Online presence
  • Viral marketing
  • Cybersecurity risks
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