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You have received a bill from a mobile phone (or cell phone) company for international call charges relating to a time when you did not use your phone for international calls. Write a letter to the company, Complaining about this Giving your reasons Asking for the bill to be changed

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Dear Sir/Madam I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
 letter to register my complaint regarding a bill which I
recieved
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received
 in
this
 month.
Actually
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Actually,
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 I
get
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got
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bill
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a bill
the bill
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 for international calling which cost me around 50$ more
with
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than
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 my actual bill.
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task achievement
Consider expanding the letter to include more detailed explanations and reasoning. This helps achieve a more complete response to the task.
coherence cohesion
Adding transitional devices between sentences can aid in logical flow, enhancing the coherence of the letter.
coherence cohesion
The greeting is polite and appropriately addresses the recipient.
task achievement
The letter uses a polite tone, which suits the purpose of the complaint letter well.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Billing discrepancy
  • Inaccurate charges
  • Customer service
  • Billing cycle
  • Itemized statement
  • Rectification
  • Resolving billing issues
  • Goodwill gesture
  • Accuracy in billing
  • Proactive communication
  • Service provider
  • Customer satisfaction
  • Adjustment of charges
  • Billing department
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