The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer 

goods in 2010
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The bar graph compares France and England's expenditure on five goods in 2010.
Overall
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,
British
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people consumed more, with cars being the most popular goods.
However
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, the
French'
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French
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expenditures were slightly higher in terms of computers and perfumes. Cars were the most sought-after goods in 2010, with
British
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and French spending 450,000 and 400,000 on them respectively.
In contrast
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,
while
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400,000
pounds
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sterling was spent on books in England, French residents only spent 300,000
pounds
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on them.
This
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disparity between the two nations becomes more apparent in terms of camera' expenditure, where the figure for France was half of England, at 150,000
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sterling.
Although
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consumerism was more dominant among the
British
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in
this
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specific year, the French spent more on computers and perfumes. In terms of computers, with a negligible difference, the French outspent Great Britain by over 350,000
pounds
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of sterling being spent on
this
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particular good.
Moreover
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, French citizens paid 200,00
pounds
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,
while
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the
British
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roughly spent 150,000
pounds
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on perfumes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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