The two maps below show an olympic and paraolympic village in 2000 and the same village today Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant

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The two maps picture above compare the Olympics and Paralympics in 2000 and the same town today.

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it is clear that

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the town has evolved a lot in recent years. There are new facilities have been added.

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, to a new highway in the middle of the village. Looking at the information in more detail, obviously, the Olympic Village

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has had

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a huge

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development in past years. There

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new buildings that can serve the city's citizens. Looking at the maps on the north side we can see there is a new car park space. Next to it, we can notice that the fitness centre has been extended.

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, there is a new village square beside the welcome centre.

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. There is a new route in the middle of the town to connect all the places together.

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, There are two new hospital buildings on the south side across the road. In the east corner in 2000 there used to be a car park.

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. It become a multi-faith centre. And the car parking replaced to the opposite corner.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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5 paragraphs

179 words

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The two maps below show an olympic and paraolympic village in 2000 and the same village today Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant

Millions of dollars are spent on space research evey year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages ot this outweigh the disadventages?

Nowadays,The way many people interact with each other has it changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the type of relation that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development.

You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.