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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
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The given line graph shows
the
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information about the quantities of goods transported in the UK, broken down into four different modes of transport:
road
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, water, rail, and
pipeline
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, between 1974 and 2002.
Overall
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, it can be clearly observed that
number
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a number
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 of goods distributed on
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road
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the road
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were
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 the largest,
whereas
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 that of with
pipeline
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were
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 the smallest among all means throughout the
givern
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given
 time frame. In 1974, a closer look at the line graph report that
at
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about 70
million
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tonnes
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 of products were delivered by
road
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 which was the largest
quanitities
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quantities
 of all other modes of transport, followed by water and rail at the dame figures
at
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 40
million
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tonnes
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, and
pipeline
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 at less than 10%, respectively. From 19750 to
early
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the early
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 1980s, it can
be notice
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 that
while
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Road
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 and rail underwent a slight drop, the other two experienced
a
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growing figures. Around 1982 onwards, goods
that
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transport
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transported
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 on
road
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 rose at
constant
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a constant
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 rate before
reached
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reaching
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its
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their
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 peak at about 95
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002, that of those shipped by water
were gradually rise
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gradually rose
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 to above 60
million
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tonnes
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. Surprisingly, the quantities of products distributed by
rails
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rail
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 experienced some fluctuation of less than 40
million
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tonnes
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 before remained stable with the same figures at 40
million
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tonnes
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,
whereas
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pipeline
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 reached its
peaked
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 at above 20
millions
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million
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tonnes
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 and remained stable till the end.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, pipeline, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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