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The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three dif erent areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Write at least 150 words

The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three dif erent areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Write at least 150 words
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The line graph illustrates the
wheat
export
 from three different areas
such
 as
Australia
,
Canada
, and
European
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the European
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 community in
5 year
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5-year
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 periods.
Overall
, it can be seen that the highest
wheat
export
 was
European
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apply
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in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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,
while
 the lowest was
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in australia
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australia
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Australia
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.  In detail, In 1985,
Canada
 was the
higher
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most
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 country that
export
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exported
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wheat
 around almost 20, followed by
European
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Europe
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 and
Australia
 about under
than
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apply
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20. the next year
after
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apply
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, the number of
wheat
export
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exports
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 in
Canada
 and
European
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Europe
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were
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apply
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slightly decreased around under 20 for
Canada
 dan under 15 for
European
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Europe
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.
besides
 that, the number of
wheat
export
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exports
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 in
Canada
was
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apply
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significant
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significantly
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 increased until 1988
and
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apply
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declined again in 1989 and slowly increased
in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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.
In addition
, in 1986 the number of
wheat
export
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exports
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 from
european
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European
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was slowly increase
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was slowly increased
was slowly increasing
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 and remained stable until 1988 and
dramatic
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dramatically
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 increased
in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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around
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to
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 more than 20 and
exceeding
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exceeded
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Canada
.
In contrast
, In 1985,
Australia
 was the lowest country that
export
wheat
 around 15 and slowly increased in the next year, after that gradually
decrease
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decreased
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 until 1990 around more than 10.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, export, australia, canada, european with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • compare
  • pattern
  • peak
  • noteworthy
  • consistency
  • stability
  • overview
  • analyze
  • summarize
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