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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors who satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors who satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The table and pie charts illustrate information about the
amount
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number
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 of travellers to
Ashdown
Museum
 and the rank of
comfort
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the comfort
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 of them with their journey during the
year
 before and the
year
 after it was refurbished.
Overall
,
Ashdown
Museum
was
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attracted more
visitors
 after it was renewed.
In addition
, the survey shows that the level of satisfaction improves positively by
visitors
.
To begin
 with the table, It is readily apparent that
total
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a total
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 number of travellers, who come to
Ashdown
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the Ashdown
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Museum
,
increases
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increased
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considerablely
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considerably
 by 18.000
people
 after it was refurbished. Turning
toward
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the pie charts, it
points
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 out
impressive
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an impressive
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 change
of
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in
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visitors
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visitor
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 satisfaction during the two surveyed
period
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periods
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.
Initialy
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Initially
,
people
, who are very satisfied and
satified
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satisfied
,
rise
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rose
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 sharply from 45% to 75%. Among these, the most remarkable increase is the
people
 group, who are very
satified
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satisfied
 by 20% after the
Ashdown
Museum
 was reconstructed.
Moreover
, the rate of
dissatifaction
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dissatisfaction
visitors
 accounts
the
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 biggest proportion in
year
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the year
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 before refurbishment at 40%, which decreases significantly to 15% in
year
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the year
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 after refurbishment.
Last
 but not least, the rate of
people
, who are very dissatisfied,
also
go
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 down from 10% to 5% in the same surveyed times. Meanwhile,
people
 do not have
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 at 5% in the two periods.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ashdown, museum, year, visitors, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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