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The chart below shows the literacy rates of three different continents between 1930 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the literacy rates of three different continents between 1930 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table represents the
percenatge
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percentage
 of
literacy
rates
 of people in different continents over
a
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the
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 period 1990 to 2000.
Overall
, it is evident that males had the highest proportion of
literacy
 in
world
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the world
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,
whereas
, Europe was the most literate continent
through
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over
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 the period of a decade.
To begin
 with, more than 85% of males were educated in
world
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the world
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,
moreover
, around 80% of
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the world
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world
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world's
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 population was literate. Europe had
highest
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the highest
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literacy
rates
which
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apply
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accounted
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accounting
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 for 98%
,
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apply
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 and more than
same
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the same
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percenatge
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percentage
 of men and women were educated. America was the second literate continent with 93.6%
of
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apply
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literacy
rates
.
Furthermore
, Africa had the
least
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lowest
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rates
in
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of
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literacy
 with less than 70%, roughly half percentage of women were literate in
this
 continent. In Asia, around 80% of
population
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the population
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were
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was
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 educated, meanwhile, more than 90% of
people's
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people
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 of
Ocenia
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Oceania
literate
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are literate
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,
includes
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including
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same
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the same
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 percentage of men and women.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words literacy, rates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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