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The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminum cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminum cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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The given diagram illustrates the
step by
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step
 process of the recycling of
aluminums
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aluminium
cans
.
Overall
, The process involves seven consecutive steps starting with gathering old used
cans
 from
dustbin
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, to
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into
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them into
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new
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the new
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 recycled
can
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cans
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.
To begin
 with, at first used
cans
 are collected by garbage trucks from different dustbins present in the area.
Second
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step
 involves cleaning
of
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cans
 and
then
sorting
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sorting them
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. After that, these
cans
 are compressed
in
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into
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 big compressors. These compressed
block
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blocks
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 of
cans
 are heated at
high
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a high
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temperature
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temperatures
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 which
converted
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it
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them
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 into molten liquid.
This
 liquid
are
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is
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than
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then
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 cool down and converted into thin sheets of 2.5mm to 6mm thickness. These sheets are
than
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then
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 rolled to
get
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apply
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fit in
next
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 rolling machine. In the
last
 second
step
,
rolling
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the rolling
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 machine cuts the metal in the shape of
cans
.
Hence
, at the
last
 newly recycled aluminum
cans
 are
produce
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produced
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. In the UK, around a quarter of
cans
 are recycled
cans
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words step, cans with synonyms.
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