Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economics around the world.However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and environment is often ignored. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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that
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deal contributed to economics around the world is
tourism
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rapid
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growing industries. On the
one
hand, the
after effects
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on
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tourism
such
as local culture and
environment
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damage
is
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often ignored.
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is
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completely
disagree
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with
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later
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statement because it can help
local
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the local
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community through
economic
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the economic
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transaction
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and eco-
tourism
to restore the
environment
.
Tourism
can help
on
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the
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economy
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development where the transaction that happens in the local community
to promote
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local cultures
such
as selling traditional clothes or merchandise.
As a result
, the money can be used
on preserving
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their culture and enhance
tourists
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tourists'
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awareness
on
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their traditional dance.
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, Pegringsingan village in Bali
use
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collective funds from sellers to restore their cultural building for
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performance and exhibition facilities.
Furthermore
,
One
type of
tourism
called eco-
tourism
is rising on trend because it helps to reduce environmental damage. The program consists of activities in
national
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the national
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park
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and living
on
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Eco-hotel with less waste can help to prevent bigger
environment
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degradation
compare
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to conventional
tourism
. Kalimantan Eco-
tourism
is
one
of the
example
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where seeing orang utan activity and
stay
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on
boat
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the boat
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are part of their programs.
There
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programs
are
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not only help tourists to donate
on
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the national park but
also
increase awareness
on
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environment
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the environment
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. In conclusion,
tourism
is
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not always
giving
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on bad impact but
also
it helps to preserve local culture and
environment
through its
actitivities
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activities
.
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