The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

It is considered that
most
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important goal of
science
to
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is to
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make
individuals
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individuals'
individual's
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life
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better. I agree with the statement, Because
science
play
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a very important role in
people
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people's
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health,
without
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and without
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proper medical
science
will be very difficult to
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save
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anyones
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anyone
anyone's
live
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life
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.
On the other hand
, developments in
technology
also
plays
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a great role in making
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a person
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person
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person's
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life
easier. The main aim of medical
science
is to save
people
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people's
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life
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lives
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. Doctors and scientists are researching
in finding
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to find
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cure
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of
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for
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every
diseases
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disease
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,
such
cancer
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as cancer
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, depression etc. Because of recent
development
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in medical
science
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science,
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it can be seen that
success
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rate
to save
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of saving
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any
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apply
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one
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apply
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lifes
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lives
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is
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has
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increase
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drastically.
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:
at
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during
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the time covid pandemic doctors and
researches
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researchers
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were working very hard
in finding
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to find
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the
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a
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vaccine
of
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for
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corone,
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and at
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at
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the end they
become
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successful in their mission.
This
proofs
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the dedication of doctors towards saving
life
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the life
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of
peoples
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people
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. In the field of
technology
,
engineers
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engineers'
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main aim
to
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is to
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makes
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make
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poeple
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people
life
easier. As
the
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apply
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technology
increase
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new inventions
took
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placed
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place
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in
couple
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of years,
one
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and one
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of the great
invention
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inventions
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is
internet
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the internet
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.
Internet
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help
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helps
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us to connect with
world
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, and gather useful information from
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the website
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website
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websites
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. Nowadays it is very difficult to imagine
life
without
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the internet
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internet
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. It helps in every field
such
medical
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as medical
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, education, traveling, banking etc. In the
upcoming
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apply
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future, AI
technology
will change the
life
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lives
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of everyone. It can process any task on
her
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its
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own
,
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apply
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and can provide
solution
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a solution
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of
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to
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any problem. In conclusion,
science
play
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plays
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a very
curical
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crucial
role in individual
life
, medical
science
helps in making
people
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people's
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health better, meanwhile,
techonlogy
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technology
helps in making
people
's
life
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lives
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fast and easy.
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Work on sentence structure and grammar. Avoid run-on sentences and ensure verb agreement.
task response
Provide more specific examples and elaborate on them to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a logical connection between ideas. Use transition words to guide the reader through your points.
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Clearly states a position in the introduction supporting that science should improve people's lives.
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Provides examples of the positive impact of medical science and technology on people's lives.
coherence cohesion
Both an introduction and conclusion are present, clearly framing the essay.

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