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The table and pie charts give information about the total value and the sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 to 2000

The table and pie charts give information about the total value and the sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 to 2000
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The table illustrates
about
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the value of fish importance to United States between 1988 to 2000. There are
also
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 charts which
shows
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 the source countries and their
ratio
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 of imported fish to the United States.
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, It seems that the total value slightly increased
these
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during these
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 periods. The
importence
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importance
ratio
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 from China
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 rose between 1988 to 2000 but it was the opposite for Canada. İt had a downward trend in the relevant years. Regarding the table, the value of the imports rose from 6,57 billion dollars to 10.72 billion dollars. At the start of the period Canada had
the
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60
%60 of the fish that
imported
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 to the United States and it was the biggest source country.
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 it fell
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to 34% in 1992 and
the
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 had the lowest
ratio
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 in 2000 with %28. But
he
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sitaution
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 was the opposite for China. İt started to %13 in 1988 and steadily increased
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 had a peak o with %30 in 2000. The most
importanted
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important
 point in
this
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 pie chart was the change
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 the
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 the
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 for it %27 in 1988, it had a significant increase in 1992 with %46.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ratio with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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