Task one graph shows the number of weekly hospital admissions in five hospitals in a country in europ in 2004 to 2018

Task one graph shows the number of weekly hospital admissions in five hospitals in a country in europ in 2004 to 2018
The graph illustrates the
number
of hospital
admission
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admissions
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on
weekly
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a weekly
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basis for five different
hospitals
in one country in
Europ
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Europe
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over
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from the year 2004 to 2018. It is notable that over the years four
hospitals
had an increase in hospital
admissions
whereas
Oxaly
hospital
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Hospital
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experienced a significant decrease in the
number
of admitted people. In 2004, Oxley was the hospital with the highest
number
of patients
admission
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admitted
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with 250
person
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people
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per
week
and experienced a downward trend over the 14-year period and reached a low of 110 admonitions per
week
. Fortsmith
hospital
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Hospital
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had around 180
admissions
in the year 2004
then
experienced some fluctuation between 2010 and 2014 before they (Time finished here)
levlled
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levelled
off at 200
admissions
per
week
. Adlin
hospital
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Hospital
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had120
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had 120
admission
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admissions
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in 2004
then
experienced a substantial increase in the
number
of hospital
admission
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admissions
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over 14 years,
then
soared to 250
admissions
in 2018. The hospital
admission
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admissions
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in both Bradly and Sandton
hospitals
were 200 and 80 respectively
admissions
per
week
. Both
hospitals
saw a gradual rise in the
number
of
admissions
until they ended at 270 and 160
admissions
in the year 2018.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, admission, hospitals, admissions, week with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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