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The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011.

The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011.
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 of people living in each other's territory from five different European countries: the UK, Germany, Italy, Poland, and Spain, in 2011.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that the
number
 of German
peoples
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people
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 living abroad
were
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 the greatest,
whereas
 that of Polish
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 the fewest.
However
, it is interesting to note that
Poland
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populations
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population
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 had the highest
number
 of European citizens among all other nations
To begin
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 that at nearly 1.2
miilion
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million
 people, the total
number
 of four European populations living in Poland was the highest of all compared regions, followed by the United Kingdom at roughly 1 million
peoples
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 and Spain at 861,000
peoples
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. Surprisingly, only
few
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 Polish moved out from their hometown at 6,000
peoples
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people
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,
while
 that of
Italian
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Italians
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were
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 almost fourfolded at 196,000
peoples
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. With regards to the total overseas populations in each individual
countries
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country
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, it can be noticeable that
Polland
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Poland
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 had the highest figures at 1.1 million
peoples
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people
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 which was roughly five times larger
that
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of in
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 Spain.
In addition
, Italy marked
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its second place with 863,670
peoples
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 which was about 300,000 more than the remaining two nations.
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