Putting criminals into prisons is not an effective way to deal with them. Instead, education and job training should be offered. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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and job practices.From my own perspective,I agree with part of the point of view,and I will demonstrate the reasons. One possible approach is sending
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to the
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of all,it is
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for the staff to
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control,whether work or rest
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based on a settled schedule,to develop
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healthy habits to improve the quality of life.
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,there are
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to diverse zones to give some punishments.
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,in China,there are three kinds of
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of alert for people who stoled or drunken driving and so on.
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for
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criminal
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than 15 years,and
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is more than 15 years or life imprisonment.
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the assorts of crime and
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to have some
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can alert other citizens to obey the rules,individuals who
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the law will be punished
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,and celebrities are no exception.
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have
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of alert
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,they out of touch with society for too long,
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, they will have a high unemployment rate.Without stabilized income,they will commit a crime again in
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.So the other alternative approach is first,to carry out some relative classes in
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,teach them some laws and the significance of
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the rules.Let them regulate their own
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society they will have a matching career to find their own value.
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,it is valuable to provide some education for the
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. To sum it up,there are so many
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and
also
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them learn some rules and skills.
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approaches will contribute
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healthy and peaceful society,
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,we will have a bright future.

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Language
Try to maintain consistent language and avoid spelling mistakes. For example, ensure words like 'convenient', 'integrated', and 'behaviors' are spelled correctly.
Examples
Expand your examples with more details and context. This will strengthen your argument and make it more persuasive.
Clarity
Be careful with sentence structure and clarity. Revise your statements to improve their clarity and ensure they convey your intended meaning.
Conclusion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main ideas and offers a thoughtful resolution.
Structure
You structured your essay with clear paragraphs, which helps in presenting your ideas in an organized manner.
Task Response
You address the prompt by discussing both perspectives, showing an understanding of the complexity of the issue.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recidivism
  • reintegration
  • rehabilitation
  • punitive measures
  • mindset
  • behavioral change
  • workforce preparation
  • prospects
  • reoffending
  • employment opportunities
  • socioeconomic
  • low-risk offenders
  • serious offenders
  • balance
  • productive members of society
  • economic burden
  • public safety
  • offender rehabilitation
  • transformative programs
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