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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Two pictures illustrate the transformation of a harbour from 2000 to now. It has already been greatly enhanced than it was in the past. First of all, the Porth Harbour was sufficiently equipped with essential and important facilities
that
is
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 primary for a harbour. Nowadays, those not only are being maintained but
also
 significantly improved.
For instance
, the main part, a dock which has two slots for anchoring and
located
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 at the
northside
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north side
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 with a public
beach
 above has been maximized with one more anchorage.
In addition
, a complex that took place in the west has been dramatically changed: fishing
boats
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 area is swapped for
marina
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a marina
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, showers and toilets are doubled,
bigger
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the bigger
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 car park is
also
 linked with
main
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the main
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 road.
Besides
, an unexploited area opposite
with
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the dock is a peninsula which has a disused castle at the corner and a public
beach
behind
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.
However
, it has been unbelievably upgraded, a hotel with a connected road replaces the old castle,
public
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the public
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beach
turns
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 into a private
beach
 which is owned by the hotel and
the
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new cafes and shops
are
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have been
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 constructed
as a result
in
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 development. In conclusion, the promotion of
this
 port is tending to tourism.
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task achievement
Support points with specific details from the diagrams, as this will enhance the clarity and relevance of comparisons.
coherence cohesion
Improve transitions between ideas to enhance logical flow.
coherence cohesion
Introduction clearly sets the stage for comparing the two versions of the harbour.
task achievement
Good use of specific terms like "anchorage" and "peninsula" demonstrates understanding of the subject matter.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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