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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050
The 4 pie charts represent the data of the resident’s
age
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 in 2000 and the prediction to 2950.
Overall
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, the number of
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age
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aged
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 from 5-59
years
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of
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in
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Yemen
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 in 2050 made up the
llargest
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largest
 percentage
while
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 the old people over 60
years
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of
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in
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Yemen
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 in 2000 was the smallest data.
Morover
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Moreover
, the data
also
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 showed
up
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apply
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the
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that
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 children
less
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younger
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 than 14 in
two
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the two
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 countries
are
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has
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decreasing
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decreased
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 in 50
years
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.
Initially
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, 46.3% of the living
age
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 from 15-59 of
Yemen
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 people before it
start
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started
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 rising up to 57.3 in 2050. The percentage
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age
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aged
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 more than 60 in over 50
years
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, from 3.6% in 2000 and up
tp
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to
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 5.6 in 2050. On the other
hanf
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hand
, in 2000 46.3% of the
Yemen
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 population was 0-14
aged
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years old
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,
it
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apply
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compare
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compared
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 to 24.1%. In Italy, by 2050,
this
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percent
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percentage will
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 decline to 37% in
Yemen
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 and 11.5% in Italy.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, years, yemen with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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