The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007.

The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007.
The line graph presents data about
car
ownership in Britain between 1971 and 2007. Throughout the period one
car
ownership has
remainded
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remained
steady. As can be seen
the
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graph the
people
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number of people
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who
has
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have
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one
car
were about 45%
1971
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from 1971
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-2007.
Poeople
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People
who
has
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did
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not
any
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a
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car
were about 50% in 1971.
However
, it
downwarded
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decreased
to probably 23% in 2007.
Although
, in 1971, the two
car
owner amount rate was around 8%, it
was
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dramatically increased till 2007. Amount of people who
has
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have
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three or more
car
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cars
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has risen probably from 2% to 7% during these years.
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  • percentage
  • household
  • trend
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • ownership
  • period
  • peak
  • dip
  • noteworthy
  • consistent
  • dramatic
  • highlight
  • significant
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