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The maps provide key information about the
change
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changes
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 that have taken place in the city from its establishment in 1950 until the present day.
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, it is clear from the graph that the map has undergone substantial redevelopment with several features either relocated or transformed.
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, the 1950 layout had a lot of empty
lands
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land
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,
whereas
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 the current layout shows a symmetrical design with various
characterization
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characteristics
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.
According to
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 what is shown, in 1950,
the
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they
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are
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were
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to
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two
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 main roads with
business
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the business
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 district being in the middle and
residential
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the residential
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 area around it from the north. The river
located
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is located
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 at the south,
while
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 the bridge across the river. It featured with airport and government
building
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buildings
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. In terms of the current layout, the business area has become larger about double space, residential area turned into
huge
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a huge
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 space around
all
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apply
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the
city
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whole city
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.
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, the airport has become bigger to contain more people. The second bridge was constructed to connect old roads with the new
one
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ones
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