The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.

The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.
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The line graph illustrates the
rate
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per 1000 smoking in Someland from 1960
t0
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to
2000.
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, we can see the
rate
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in 1960 for each
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men
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man
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and
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women
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woman
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is
deffirent
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different
in
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the begining
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begining
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beginning
, and the
rate
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has change
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change
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in
the
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recent years.
However
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, the
pere
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per
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cent of
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men
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in 1960 was highest than
a
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that
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women
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of women
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, since the number smoking
of
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the
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men
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reach
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reached
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600, unlike
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women
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, in 1960 there
are
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were
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no
women
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smoking, but the
rate
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of
women
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change
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in 1965, as the number increased until 1975 the
rate
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remain
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steady and
then
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deceased
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decreased
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to 200 in 2000,
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the
rate
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of the
men
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who smoking decreased gradually to above 220 in 2000. In conclusion, the rates of smoking in Someland
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the
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both
gender
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genders
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(
men
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and
women
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),
start
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started
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in 1960 with a huge
diffrence
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difference
between them, and
then
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in 1975 the
number of
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rates
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rate
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for both downward trend in 2000 to 200.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, men, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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