The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The bar graph illustrates the number of individuals participating in six different
sport
in 1997 and 2017. The unit is measured in thousands.
Fix the agreement mistake
sports
Overall
, it is evidant
that the majority of students prefer to play tennis, Correct your spelling
evident
whereas
, basketball was
the least preferred sport.
Wrong verb form
is
To begin
with, more than 50 thousand
of
adults participated in Tennis in both given years, meanwhile, Football and Rugby were the second favoured Change preposition
apply
game
, the slightly less Fix the agreement mistake
games
50
Change preposition
than 50
thousand
were participated
in 1997, and, more than 30 Wrong verb form
participating
thousand
in 2017. Meanwhile, in case
of swimming same number of Correct article usage
the case
student
Fix the agreement mistake
students
participate
in both given years around 35 Wrong verb form
participated
thousand
.
Furthermore
, In Basketball and cricket
a very small of individuals participated. In 1997, Add a comma
cricket,
a
less than 10 Correct article usage
apply
thousand
played Basketball, and almost
Add an article
the almost
same
number of adults participated in cricket in 2017, Correct article usage
the same
whereas
, 25 thousand
played cricket in 1997. However
, in case
of golf around 30 Correct article usage
the case
thousand
Correct your spelling
30,000
of
participated in Change preposition
apply
given
Correct article usage
a given
years
.Fix the agreement mistake
year
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