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U.S. Energy Consumption - Task 1 You should spend 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows U.S. Energy Consumption by Fuel (1980-2030). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

U.S. Energy Consumption - Task 1 You should spend 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows U.S. Energy Consumption by Fuel (1980-2030). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
#energy #consumption #minutes #fuel #information #features #comparisons
The line graph illustrates the amount of
energy
 consumption by different sources of fuel in
US
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the US
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 over a
period
 from 1980 to 2030. The unit is measured in
Quadrillion
.
Overall
, it is evident that
,
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apply
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Petrol and oil are the main sources to produce
energy
,
whereas
, a few
units
 of
energy
produced
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are produced
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 by Hydropower.
To begin
 with, In 1980, 35
Quadrillion
units
 were generated using Petrol and oil, and
number
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the number
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 gradually
increasing
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increase
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 till 2030,
more
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when more
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 than 45
Quadrillion
 of
energy
 will be produced by
this
 fuel.
The
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A
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similarly
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 trend was observed in the
energy
 produced by coal, starting from around 15
units
in
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at
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 the
begin
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beginning
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 of the
period
 and, will end at 30
Quadrillion
. The
energy
 consumption by Natural Gas is not changing
throught
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through
throughout
 the
period
 of 50 years.
Furthermore
, the same proportion
of
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was produced by Nuclear, Solar/wind and Hydropower in 1990,
that is
 less than 5
Quadrillion
Units
. After
few
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a few
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 decades a
consider
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considerable
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 amount of increment was observed in
energy
 generation by Nuclear
energy
, meanwhile, Solar/wind and Hydropower
remain
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remained
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same
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the same
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through
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throughout
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 the
period
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, period, quadrillion, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy consumption
  • fuel sources
  • petroleum
  • natural gas
  • coal
  • renewable energy
  • hydroelectric
  • solar
  • wind
  • fossil fuels
  • upward trend
  • fluctuations
  • nuclear energy
  • steady increase
  • environmental concerns
  • technological advancements
  • projections
  • reliant
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