Some people believe that its not necessary to have internet access to live a full life. What is your opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.
First of all,
internet
is Add an article
the internet
a
incredible invention for all the Change the article
an
time
. İf we need to research something we will probably open to
the search engine. Correct pronoun usage
it to
Then
we need to only wrote
some words and result here. Change the verb
write
Really
useful component of life. I advise many people Add an article
A really
for
use Change preposition
to
google
. Already almost Capitalize word
Google
entire
world Correct article usage
the entire
use
Correct subject-verb agreement
uses
internet
because as ı mentioned it is really useful and important for science.
Sometimes Add an article
the internet
internet
isn't healthy for being humanity due to
some people seriously addicted internet
then
they are lost
their consciousness. Wrong verb form
lose
İf
you use Add the punctuation
İf,
internet
properly and you really watch out for your screen Add an article
the internet
time
and you just search to
science,sports or news like that.
İt's not a big problem it's normal for humanity. Change preposition
for
As a result
of
we are human and we have to learn our innovation for our future and raise our knowledge. But of Change preposition
apply
course
enough Add a comma
course,
time
if you pass your screen time
you have to put your phone anywhere otherwise
you will probably obsessed of
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with
internet
. At times put your phone Correct article usage
the internet
and
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on and
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go
it's
will be good for you. You should try it. Especially we should consider virtual and Unnecessary verb
it
real
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real-time
time
. Virtual time
is unreal but real time
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is actual
actual
important things for Change the word
actually
our
.
Correct pronoun usage
us
Lastly
I want to say something, don't forget we are human and we need to develop our world we shouldn't waste Add a comma
Lastly,
of
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apply
time
like games or unnecessary things. We must to thoughtful for future generation
that's why we should as possible as work. Take Fix the agreement mistake
generations
time
for your relaxing
or your development.Replace the word
relaxation
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task response
Consider clarifying your main points to create a more convincing argument.
coherence and cohesion
Organize the essay more clearly by using paragraphs effectively and ensuring each one has a distinct central idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use specific examples from your own experience or observations to support your arguments, e.g., mentioning how internet access has impacted your own life.
task response
You have pointed out the dual nature of the internet, discussing both its benefits and potential drawbacks, which adds depth to your response.
coherence and cohesion
You have maintained a conversational and engaging tone throughout the essay, which makes it enjoyable to read.
Fully explain your ideas
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- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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