The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Pie chart shows the which transports people used. Table shows reasons why they are used transports.

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The pie chart illustrates how many people use various transportation in Edmonton and the table shows people's purposes for using automobiles in the city. In overview, the majority of citizens use cars and light rail transit.

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, most drivers employ their cars to travel to work. Concerning vehicles, 45% of urban humans use cars, followed by light rail transit, which is employed by 35% of humans.

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fewer people take buses with the number 10%.

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, those who take taxis

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account for 10%.

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the table, 55% of users drive automobiles to commute to work, the figure makes up the largest percentage of all other purposes, so it is the major reason why citizens drive

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kind of vehicle. Following that, Business is another reason, which takes up the second place (45%), followed by "Taking children to school", which constitutes 40%.

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, the number of users who do the shopping and leisure activities both accounts for the same proportions(15%).

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, they have the lowest statistics.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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4 paragraphs

167 words

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The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Pie chart shows the which transports people used. Table shows reasons why they are used transports.

6. (31/01/2015) Some people say that too much attention and too many resources are given in the protection of wild animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree about this opinion?

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The population of most cities is growing as people move to cities to find work and new opportunities. What problems does overpopulation in cities cause? How can these problems be solved?

Electriv vehicles are considered to be less harmful to the environment than petrol and diesel vehicles. What prevents individuals from choosing electric vehicles? Discuss some ways to encourage people to buy electric vehicles?

Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, it creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?