The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Pie chart shows the which transports people used. Table shows reasons why they are used transports.
The pie chart illustrates how many people use various transportation in Edmonton and the table shows people's purposes for using automobiles in the city.
In overview, the majority of citizens use cars and light rail transit.
Besides
, most drivers employ their cars to travel to work.
Concerning vehicles, 45% of urban humans use cars, followed by light rail transit, which is employed by 35% of humans. Next,
fewer people take buses with the number 10%. Similarly
, those who take taxis also
account for 10%.
According to
the table, 55% of users drive automobiles to commute to work, the figure makes up the largest percentage of all other purposes, so it is the major reason why citizens drive this
kind of vehicle. Following that, Business is another reason, which takes up the second place (45%), followed by "Taking children to school", which constitutes 40%. Finally
, the number of users who do the shopping and leisure activities both accounts for the same proportions(15%). Moreover
, they have the lowest statistics.Submitted by hayashidajinja820 on
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