The line graph below shows the percentage of Internet users by population in the USA, Canada and Mexico between 1990 and 2009.​ Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The line graph below shows the percentage of Internet users by population in the USA, Canada and Mexico between 1990 and 2009.​

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The diagram depicts the information about users of
Internet
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the Internet
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, through
population
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the population
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in three different countries. The timeline is between 1999 and 2009.
Overall
, there are
Canada
,
Mexico
and the
USA
and all of them have
the
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a
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trend of increase. As seen in the line graph, the
least
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lowest
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proportion in 1999 was in
the
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Mexico
, nearly 5%.
While
two others had 20% and 10%, respectively. In 2001, the
percent
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percentage
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of users in
Mexico
and in
USA
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the USA
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had
rose
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risen
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by two times, and reached approximately 10% and 40%, respectively.
Whereas
,
index
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the index
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of
Canada
improved to 30%. In
next
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the next
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8 years, the results of
the
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Mexico
were increasing
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increased
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by two times, despite
of
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2007, when growth was only 5%. As illustrated in the graph, in 2003
proportion
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the proportion
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of
Canada
overtook the
USA
with
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by
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almost 60%, but in 2005 they had the same
percent
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percentage
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, nearly 70%.
Although
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,
after
this
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this,
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the index of
the
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Canada
were
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was
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bigger and in 2009 reached
the
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peak
with
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of
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100%,
while
the
USA
had 80%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, mexico, usa with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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