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33.The chart below shows the number of international applicants from four countries that a Europena university had from 2004 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

33.The chart below shows the number of international applicants from four countries that a Europena university had from 2004 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line chart illustrates the
number
 of international
applicants
in
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Europena
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European
university
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University
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 from four
counries
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countries
 (
China
,
Japan
, America and Russia ), from 2004 and 2008.
Overall
, the
number
 of
applicants
 from the four countries witnessed fluctuation throughout the
years
 from 2004 to 2008.
To begin
 with, the most country who recorded the highest
number
is
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in
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China
,
in
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apply
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2004 the
applicants
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 from
China
 was above 25000, and the
number
 decreased gradually during the
years
 until 2008 the
number
had
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reached 15000 ,
While
the
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America was the
oppsite
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opposite
 of
China
, in 2004 the rate of
applicants
 was in 20000, with a slightly fluctuate, the
number
 increased to over 27000 in 2008.
On the other hand
,
Japan
 and Russia show the lowest
number
 than the other countries, the
number
 in Russia was
recording
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recorded
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 throughout the
years
, unlike
Japan
who
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which
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 displayed
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a slightly
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slightly
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 rose in 2008 as
number
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the number
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reach
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reached
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to
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10000.
Therefore
, in
the
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apply
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recent
years
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years,
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 the
applicants
in
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Europena
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European
university
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University
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 had a
divarge
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diverge
 from
China
 and
Russian
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Russia
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, in the
mean time
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meantime
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 the
number
 of
applicants
 increased from America and
Japan
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, applicants, china, japan, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • trend
  • comparison
  • applicant numbers
  • peak years
  • growth
  • decline
  • pattern
  • influence
  • factors
  • diplomatic relationships
  • economic conditions
  • demand
  • convergence
  • divergence
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