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The qualities a person needs to become truly successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Everyone wants to be successful, yet any
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 for it still hasn't been discovered. It is often said that the skills that are essential to become successful can be gained at a
university
.
However
, at the same
time
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 others argue that any academic institution is not capable of helping you with that. I partly agree with
this
 statement believing that to succeed not only a
university
 is needed, but
also
 one's hard work. Academic institutions can contribute to your success in the meaning that you can gain
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 there. Nowadays, underestimating the power of knowledge has become increasingly popular, yet being well-educated is one of the most helpful things which can positively influence your
future
. Not only does it allow you to become
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 about the subjects that are important
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 you, but
also
 it broadens your understanding of the world.
Therefore
, a
university
 constitutes a place which
openes
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opened
 the door for your
future
 career.
On the other hand
, to succeed much more than just an education is needed. Many people without a higher degree become successful because of their hard work. If you are motivated enough you are able to reach your goals without a
university
.
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Consequently
, it is not essential to attend one as long as you are capable of working hard for your
future
 on your own. In conclusion, I partly agree with the statement that any academic institution will not fully help you succeed.
Although
such
 places can make you an
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overall
 wise man, it is you who have to work hard for your
future
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means of a
university
 or outside of it.
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