The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The toolbar chart and bar charts illustrate the different locations and types of dance
classes
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that are attended by many young people in specific towns in Australia.
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, almost half of the locations of
classes
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are situated at private
studios
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,
while
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the college-based
studios
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have the least
number
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of
classes
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. The ballets and tap dances are experienced
a
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large
number
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of people older than 11, compared with modern
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, which has more participants from the younger age group. 48% of the
classes
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are at private
studios
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, and the second large percentage of locations are at school halls, which represent around a quarter of all places. The community halls and other college-based
studios
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come ahead at 18 and 10
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of
total
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the total
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number
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, respectively.
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modern dance is the only type that has more participants from the older age group. The
number
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of students was 300 under 11 and more than 500 for 11 to 16 years. The other type
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younger ballet has the most children at 650 students and the least teenagers at 300. The modern type
achieve
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almost the same
number
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of students from the two age groups.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words classes, studios, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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