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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015.
The diagram depicts the number of
households
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 in the US by their 5 distinct yearly revenue between 2007 and 2015.
Overall
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, most US
households
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' revenue in the period of 2007 until 2015 was $100,000 or more, followed by $25,000 and $25,000 - $49,999. To commence, by 2007, the total of US
households
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 who gained $100,000 or more per year was slightly below 30
million
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,
while
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 those who earned less than $25,000 and $25,000 - $49,999 were approximately 8
million
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 lower, indicating a noticeable disparity.
However
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, in 2007, around 21
million
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 US residents produced $50,000 - $74,999,
whereas
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 nearly 5
million
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 fewer
individuals
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 generated $75,000 - $99,999.
On the other hand
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, in 2011, the total of US
households
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 who made less than $25,000 and $25,000 - $49,999 was almost identical, accounting for roughly 28
million
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.
In contrast
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, the number of
individuals
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 who gained $100,000 or more per year experienced a steady decline, falling to around 3
million
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 fewer compared to 2007.
Moreover
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, within the same year, the total of US
households
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 with income at $50,000 - $74,999 and $75,000 - $99,999 was around 17
million
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individuals
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 on average.
Additionally
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, by 2015, the total of US
households
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 who earned more than $100,000 annually was about 33
million
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,
while
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 those who gained less than $25,000 and $25,000 - $49,999 were close to 27
million
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, indicating a remarkable gap.
In addition
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, the number of
individuals
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 who get $50,000 - $74,999 and $75,000 - $99,999 remained relatively low approximately 11
million
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 and 15
million
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 respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, million, individuals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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