The graph provides information from a 2008 report on consumption of energy in the USA from 1980 to 2030

The graph provides information from a 2008 report on consumption of energy in the USA from 1980 to 2030
This
line graph depicts a comparison of the consumption of
energy
in the USA. It is measured by numbers in quadrillion
units
from 1980 to 2030.
Overall
, It can be clearly seen that there was an increasing trend for most types of
energy
.
However
, petrol and oil were the types with the greatest rise in the number of
energy
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.
Whereas
, hydropower was the lowest over the years.
According to
the given data in the following graph petrol and oil started
with
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35
units
in 1980. It increased sharply to reach a peak of 50
units
in 2030.
Whereas
, coal began with 16
units
approximately in 1980. It rose rapidly to end up with 30
units
in 2030.
By contrast
, natural gas started with 20
units
and it
is
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barely changed through the years.
On the other hand
, nuclear, wind
as well as
hydropower were nearly similar
according to
energy
consumption. They started with less than 5
units
in 1980.
While
in the following 3 years, they increased slightly in 1990 .
Then
they remained steady to end up with 10
units
in 2030.
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