Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

In the modern world being self-employed is widely distributed among young specialists.
This
way of working organization gives them a wide range of opportunities as they do not depend on the office schedule. The reasons are very simple. Nowadays self-employment is a trend so people prefer to plan their
time
themselves to be free for travelling and family events and
also
not to have limitations in their earnings. Another point is the online format of working so you don’t have to spend your
time
on transport.
Nevertheless
, with
such
advantages people must be ready for instability, unpaid vacation and
also
a higher rank of responsibility. I consider the freedom of choice
being
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the most significant reason
of
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self-employment as it is convenient to be absolutely free in
you
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planning.
For example
, you are able to change your plans
day
by
day
, to free some
time
for your family or relationship or for more pleasing events at the moment by postponing your
work
tasks.
Moreover
, you don’t have to
spent
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time
getting to the workplace so you
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about 2 hours per
day
for
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you
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needs like hobbies, housework or
stroll
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. As
it
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was mentioned, it’s a trend today to be self-employed so there’s a various choice of different events during the
hole
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day
and that means if you are working by yourself you can join every activity you want. And the
last
thing is that you are not restricted in your earnings. You can
work
wherever you want,
work
with people you want to
work
with and you can be paid as you wish.
On the other
hand
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being self-employed has as
much
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disadvantages as advantages written above.
Firstly
, you have much more responsibility for
you
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work
. You have to keep the level of what are doing and
also
search for clients by yourself so if you don’t you won’t have any
work
and
therefore
money.
Secondly
, you have to pay for your vacation. When you
work
in a company they pay you for
this
time
but if you are working
by
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your own you won’t have any extra earnings during
this
period so you have to plan
you
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your
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finances. And
thirdly
,
such
type of
work
organization is much more
instable
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than a career in
organization
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as you won’t have any extra money for the crisis periods. That’s why you
also
need a financial cushion. In conclusion,
be or not to be
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self-employed depends on your own choice. It provides you
a
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large number of opportunities and you are free in your choices but at the same
time
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time,
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it means you have to become a very responsible person and a reliable specialist.
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  • decision-making
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