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Writing Samples
Band 1.5

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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I agree that spending money on railways is
effevetive
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effective
to address
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in addressing
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 the urban road
system
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too
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being too
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 crowd.
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,people
live
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who live
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 in countyside
who
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and
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 need
car
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a car
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 to commute to work usually drive
by
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apply
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themself,if
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railway
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the railway
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 is more
convient
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convenient
,they
well
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will
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 take it more.
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,the railways are spent more money,the
system
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well
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will
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 get better,it is helpful that decrease people's dependence on their cars.
As a result
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,it is effective that
reduce
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reducing
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volume
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the volume
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 of traffic on the road.
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,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
governments
need
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needs
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 to increase funding for
railway
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system
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 service
become
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to become
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 available,it
well rise
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will raise
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 city
dewellers'
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dwellers
 tax,
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and resdients
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resdients
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residents
 may become
unwelling
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unwilling
.In
addtion
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addition
,
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railway
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the railway
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well
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will
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 become
overcrowed
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overcrowded
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 because
of
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apply
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people want to
use
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use them
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. In conclusion,there
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are serveal
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serveal
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several
 reasons
of
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for
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 the situation,in the long run,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 build
better
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a better
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railway
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system
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 which
need
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needs
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 to plan step by step to help urban residents to build a best
countries
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country
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language
Work on improving vocabulary and grammar to express ideas more clearly and accurately.
content
Develop each argument more fully with specific examples and relevant evidence.
structure
Use connectors and transition words consistently to enhance the logical flow of ideas.
content
The essay clearly takes a position on the issue and provides reasons for the viewpoint.
structure
The writer attempts to present a balanced perspective by acknowledging potential drawbacks.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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