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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people`s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people`s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The given diagram illustrates information about habits of drinking and buying
coffee
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 and tea in five Australian cities in the
last
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 4
weeks
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.
Overall
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,
people
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 who went to a café to drink
coffee
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 or tea were the biggest group in all of these five cities in comparison with the other two categories,
instead
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 of
Adelaide
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. The
percentage
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 of
people
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 who bought fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
Linking Words
 4
weeks
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 in Sydney was the highest with almost 48% and 42% in Melbourne. In Hobart
people
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 who went to café were approximately 38%,
however
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; the smallest
percentage
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 in
this
Linking Words
 category was Brisbane and
Adelaide
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 with less than 35%. The
people
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 who bought instant
coffee
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 in the
last
Linking Words
 4
weeks
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 were close to 55% in Hobart and 53% in Brisbane. In
Adelaide
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 a half and in Melbourne nearly 48% of
people
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 bought instant
coffee
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 and a quarter in Sydney. The
percentage
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 going to a
coffee
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 for drinking a
coffee
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 or tea in
last
Linking Words
 4
weeks
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 was approximately 63% in Melbourne and Hobart which are the same.
Although
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 the figure for going to café in Sydney is higher than 60%, in Brisbane is 5% lower which is almost 55% and in
Adelaide
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 with 50% is the smallest
percentage
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 at 50%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, weeks, people, adelaide, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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