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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantage and disadvantages of renting a home?

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The question of whether to rent or buy property is very topical today, as so many
people
 are renting
the
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homes
. There are some possible advantages and disadvantages.
This
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the
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 reasons both pros and cons. Regarding the benefits, it seems that renting a
home
more
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is more
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 economical than buying it.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, many
people
 like to move to
other place
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another place
other places
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due to
 their jobs.
For example
, my friend who works in
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the central
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central bank
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Central Bank
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 of Indonesia
have
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 to move to another province in Indonesia. It would be less dramatic to let the rental
home
.
In addition
, renting a
home
 offers the flexibility to accommodate the busy lifestyle of individuals. They do not need to redecorate their houses which need a bunch of money and ask permission
to
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 the
landlords
 to do it. Based on these points, many
people
 prefer to take rental
homes
. Moving to the drawbacks, it would seem that renting a
home
 takes a lot of energy,
for instance
on
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moving to
other
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another
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 house requires a
numerous
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lot of
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 labor to
lifting
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 the meubels.
In addition
,
the
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people
 who like to redecorate their
homes
due to
 their interests need permission
to
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the
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their
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landlords
.
Moreover
, they have to relocate if the
landlords
 want to use their properties. It is believed that the tenants have to prevent the damage of the rental
homes
due to
 the relationship with the
landlords
.
Hence
, the cons of renting a
home
 may affect the relationship
beteween
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between
 the tenants and the
landlords
. In conclusion, the advantage of renting a
home
 is
wiser
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greater
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due to
 the circumstance of
people
 that has to move regularly.
Although
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, there are some disadvantages in terms of
relationship
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the relationship
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 between the tenants and the
landlords
.
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clear comprehensive ideas
Enhance clarity in idea expression. A few sections of the essay could benefit from more precise language to clearly convey complex thoughts.
relevant specific examples
Use relevant examples to strengthen arguments. For example, support points with data or more detailed anecdotes.
introduction conclusion present
Effective introduction and conclusion. Both sections effectively frame the topic and summarize the key points of the essay.
logical structure
Logical structure is present. The essay follows a systematic approach to discussing both advantages and disadvantages of renting.
supported main points
Main points are adequately supported. The essay presents clear arguments with some supporting examples.

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