The chart below shows the result of a survey of patients who stayed in three different wards of a hospital. It shows what percentage of the patients replied ‘very good’ about various aspects of their hospital experience.

The chart below shows the result of a survey of patients who stayed in three different wards of a hospital. It shows what percentage of the patients replied ‘very good’ about various aspects of their hospital experience.
The chart depicts the feedback of the
pateints
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patients
who were admitted
various
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to various
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wards of
Hospital
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the Hospital
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.
Overall
,Holly
ward
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Ward
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was
top rated
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top-rated
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while
Oak
ward
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Ward
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was lagging behind it.Maple
ward
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Ward
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stood at third position most of the
time
except
waiting
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for waiting
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time
.
Firstly
,Maple
ward
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Ward
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stayed at 1st
postion
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position
for all the different parameters.Percentages for the
hostpital
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hospital
staff,
quality
time
and
quality
of care are comparable and the value is close to 90%
while
waiting
time
for
this
section was 75% which
relatively
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is relatively
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lesser than other factors.Oak
ward
was
second
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the second
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most liked award by the patients and the
resposes
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responses
for hospital staff,waiting
time
,
Quality
treatment and
quality
of aftercare
are
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were
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68%,54%,80% and 70% respectively.Maple
ward
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Ward
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has poor performance as compared to others.
However
,
waiting
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the waiting
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time
for
this
was
more
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longer
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than Oak
ward
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Ward
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.It was outperforming in the
quality
of treatment but
still
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still,
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value is less than
other
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the other
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two.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ward, time, quality with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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