The table and pie chart illustrate populations in Australia according to different nationalities and areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table and pie chart depict a comparison of populations in Australia
according to
various types of nationalities and areas. They are measured by percentages.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that Chinese people were the greatest rise in the city and the lowest in the country side
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countryside
according to
the table. Whereas
, Australian people were the highest and the Dutch was the bottom regarding the pie chart.
According to
the given data in the following table, Chinese
populations were 99% in the city and only 1% in the Correct article usage
the Chinese
country side
. Correct your spelling
countryside
However
, the Australian
who lived in the city were triple Fix the agreement mistake
number of Australians
than
in the countryside. It was 80% to 20%. Correct word choice
that
While
British, New zealander
and Correct your spelling
Zealanders
dutch
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Dutch
were
nearly shared similar percentages.
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apply
On the other hand
, Australian people were 73% according to
the pie chart. By contrast
, Dutch , chinese
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Chinese
as well as
New zealander
had Change the capitalization
Zealander
Zealand
a small percentages
. Correct the article-noun agreement
a small percentage
small percentages
Finally
, other nationalities obtained only 1%.Submitted by saroooniiq8 on
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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