The table and pie chart illustrate populations in Australia according to different nationalities and areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and pie chart illustrate populations in Australia according to different nationalities and areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table and pie chart depict a comparison of populations in Australia
according to
various types of nationalities and areas. They are measured by percentages.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that Chinese people were the greatest rise in the city and the lowest in the
country side
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countryside
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according to
the table.
Whereas
, Australian people were the highest and the Dutch was the bottom regarding the pie chart.
According to
the given data in the following table,
Chinese
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the Chinese
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populations were 99% in the city and only 1% in the
country side
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countryside
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.
However
, the
Australian
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number of Australians
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who lived in the city were triple
than
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that
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in the countryside. It was 80% to 20%.
While
British, New
zealander
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Zealanders
and
dutch
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Dutch
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were
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nearly shared similar percentages.
On the other hand
, Australian people were 73%
according to
the pie chart.
By contrast
, Dutch ,
chinese
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Chinese
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as well as
New
zealander
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Zealander
Zealand
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had
a small percentages
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a small percentage
small percentages
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.
Finally
, other nationalities obtained only 1%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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