It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishments should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviours to children?

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can use to make them go onto
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path in upcoming paragraphs. First of all, I believe
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development and
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in early years is what can be seen in teens and adults. So it
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necessary to make them realise
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mistakes and show them the
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path. Here, some might think that it is too early, let them be free but, most
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is where
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and
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and let the young ones be the way they are.
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it becomes difficult and impossible to make the kids realise that they are going
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was kind of slapping his mother, that was taken
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way. but when the same thing
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in later years,
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looked sad. That means there is
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used to have very strict ways of correcting
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Ensure clarity and reduce ambiguity by clearly articulating points and examples throughout the essay. This will help readers understand your perspective more easily.
coherence cohesion
Develop a more coherent structure by using clearer topic sentences and logical transitions between paragraphs. This will enhance the flow of your essay.
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The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion on teaching children the difference between right and wrong.
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Your essay correctly addresses the issue of teaching children ethical behavior at an early age and discusses the role of parents and teachers, aligning well with the task response requirement.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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