It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishments should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviours to children?

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Children are not just
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of a particular country but they are
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for
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of
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world.
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, some ponder it is really significant to make them understand what is
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and wrong at
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age.
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me, that's absolutely
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will try to come up with some ways,
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and
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can use to make them go onto
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right
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path in upcoming paragraphs. First of all, I believe
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development and
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in early years is what can be seen in teens and adults. So it
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necessary to make them realise
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mistakes and show them the
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path. Here, some might think that it is too early, let them be free but, most
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behaviour
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consulants
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is where
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and
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make
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and let the young ones be the way they are.
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, in
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it becomes difficult and impossible to make the kids realise that they are going
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wrong
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direction.
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, I saw an advertisement in which
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was kind of slapping his mother, that was taken
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way. but when the same thing
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happened
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looked sad. That means there is
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to tell
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what is acceptable and what is not, at
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age only.
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many
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and
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used to have very strict ways of correcting
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behaviour
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the behaviour
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of their
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, the situation these days is not
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. I am sure there are other ways
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. Like, taking help of
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consultants
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, teaching kids
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through
videos and acts that can motivate them how
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can be
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a better
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place with better people.
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the end, I would say that young ones are
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one
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who can make
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more
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beautiful and peaceful place if everyone
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together to direct them and redirect them
,
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when they are
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at
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incorrect path with proper and mindful guidence.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
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