You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the percentage of people visiting GYM once a month or more between 1984 to 2003.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the percentage of people visiting GYM once a month or more between 1984 to 2003.
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The given graph illustrates the
frequency
of
Europeans
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residents
go
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to the
gym
of 4 different age
groups
over the 20-year between 1990 and 2010. A glance at the graphs reveals that all ages tend to go to the
gym
more and more.
Additionally
, young
people
from 18 to 33
years
old tend to go to the
gym
much more than middle-aged
people
from 34 to 53
years
old. In terms of the
group
of young
people
, starting from 1990,
people
aged 18-23 accounted for 15% and those aged 24-33 accounted for 17%. During the 8-year period, the
frequency
of exercising at the
gym
increased and
then
decreased in both age
groups
.
Subsequently
, the
frequency
of the youngest
group
increased sharply and peaked the hit in 2006 with 25%,
then
decreased to only 17% in 2010.
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that age
group
24-33 increased steadily each year, by 2010 the
frequency
of
this
group
up to 26%.
On the other hand
,
groups
34-43
years
old and 44-53
years
old have much lower distribution rates, 5% and 7% respectively, and remained the same for the next 4
years
. Afterwards, the
frequency
in the two
groups
increased slightly by 2% in each
group
. In the final period, the number of the 34-43 year old
group
continued to increase and reached 10% by 2010.
On the contrary
, the number of the oldest
group
continued to stabilize.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words frequency, gym, groups, people, years, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • trend
  • gym attendance
  • frequency
  • increase/decrease
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • gender disparity
  • societal norms
  • lifestyle changes
  • fitness industry
  • patterns
  • economic factors
  • public health campaigns
  • technology advancements
  • accessibility
  • workout regimes
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