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The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2015 and present day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2015 and present day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The diagrams illustrate information about the change
of
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art
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the art
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gallery
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gallery's
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 ground floor in 2015 and
present
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the present
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day
.
Overall
, the
entrance
 and the right rooms remained stable. Meanwhile, there was a considerable change
with
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 the
center
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centre
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 of
art
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the art
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gallery
 and the left place in 2015 and
present
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the present
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day
.
Initially
, it is readily apparent that the
entrance
 and
entrance
 hall did not change after
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the transforming
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transforming
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transformation
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.
Moreover
, the right rooms, which were
exhibition
room
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rooms
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 1,2,3,
also
remanied
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remained
 stable in the two periods.
By contrast
, the
center
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centre
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 of
art
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the art
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gallery
 changed completely. The receptionist moved to a new position, which was far away from
entrance
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the entrance
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 than
previous
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the previous
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 situation.
Furthermore
, a lift was constructed near
exhibition
room
 3 in
present
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the present
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day
.
While
,
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 the stairs were replaced to the left side.
Therefore
, the cafe
room
, which was situated
the
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 left corner of
art
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an art
the art
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gallery
 in 2005, was smaller and altered by the
gallery
room
at
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in
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present
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the present
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day
. In
addtion
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addition
, the
gallery
 office was destroyed and a vending machine was set in front of the
gallery
 shop.
Finally
,
the
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exhibition
room
 4 was divided into two rooms, which
was
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were
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 transformed into the
tempolary
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temporary
exhibition
 and children's area.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words art, gallery, day, entrance, exhibition, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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