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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the data on the
sales
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 of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in five major
countries
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 in a five-year gap from 1999 and 2004. First of all, the furthest differences in coffee
sales
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 between these 2 years are in the UK, with a difference of 18.5
million
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euros
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. Followed by a decent
increase
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 in Switzerland from 3 to 6
million
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euros
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.
Thus
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,
countries
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 like Denmark, Belgium and Sweden only indulge a small
increase
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, ranging from 0.2-0.5
million
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euros
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.
On the other hand
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, banana
sales
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 in these European
countries
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 varied differently, as some of the
sales
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 were unstable increased and decreased. As seen, Switzerland has the highest peak of differences as it differed by 32
million
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euros
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. Whilst, UK and Belgium had a slight
increase
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 ranging from 3.5 to 4.5
million
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euros
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.
Lastly
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, Sweden and Denmark experience a drawback as it decreases about 50-80% of the original number.
To conclude
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, the
sales
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 of Fairtrade-labelled coffee
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increase
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 variously,
while
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 European
countries
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'
sales
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 of bananas experienced a fall.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, countries, million, euros, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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